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發表於 2007-6-26 04:26:45
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Well, Star.. : X) f d) d6 ?* ~! Z, }' W
You have learnt some "bad" things... NO ENDING....9 w* A M( K/ [+ k% {; V- s3 D
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You did well in the story, however, it seems you end the story in the wrong part...
3 \( r8 { W+ E8 k# ^ x0 @Usually, if you want to end the story for your reader with space..
) F0 j& I- l0 |: @1 rI think you need to add more "DETAILS" which will provide more guidelines to the utlimate ending..! V* E, }9 ?8 M2 |2 Z, R" p
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But anyway, it just my personal opinions.....
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NICE WORK for sure... Keep it up... |
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